Monday, May 16, 2011

Mini Monday, the Shameful Neglect Edition

It's been ages since I've posted much of anything, let alone a mini Monday, but I read a little story tonight that is perfect for one, so here we go.


<== This is Zach.  He's cutesie and darling, and if the model was really the character he'd probably be wearing a scarf, something with some shimmer, with that jacket.  One night Zach's designated driver abandons him at closing time when she makes up with her boyfriend.  So Zach flirts his way into a ride home from Sergeant Stephen Miranda, aka Officer Hotness.  What follows is the whirlwind (a little too whirlwind) beginning of a relationship.  Stephen is pretty closeted.  Zach is decidedly not.  That mismatch is one that doesn't work so well.

I liked Zach a lot, and although we don't get much time to get to know him, I liked Stephen, too.  But the story was so short that it makes it a little unbelievable that they'd make the decisions they do.  And it ends before they get the chance to act on those decisions, let alone face the consequences.

At 46 pages this was a cute, fluffy little read, but there could have been real depth to the story if it was expanded to about 2-3 times that length.

3 comments:

  1. Make up some more in your head, or write up a sequel, that's what I do when the story leaves me wanting more. I have changed several endings to make them "better."
    Julie
    p.s. Also, I kind of have a soft spot for Officer Hotness... funny never did as a younger person...

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  2. Ha! Julie, I challenge you to start calling Dan "Officer Hotness" and see how he reacts. Assuming you don't already!

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  3. LOL! It would only encourage him, and he does NOT need any!
    Julie

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